That really is an interesting take on zombies! It's so unique how the disease breaks down their free will more than anything and they only attack if someone is "out of line". It's a refreshing change from zombies only having the desire to feed. Very nice and well done!
I just wanted to say, I'm so glad the narrator was able to go on with his life!! It's too bad about the cat, but hopefully he learned his lesson. I really liked the way you described Carmen, I could just imagine the way she looked!