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by machin
Sun Oct 08, 2017 6:00 pm
Forum: Scary Encounters
Topic: A Guy My Friend Hooked Up With Turned Out to Be a Serial Killer (NSFW)
Replies: 0
Views: 430

A Guy My Friend Hooked Up With Turned Out to Be a Serial Killer (NSFW)

This is a very fucked up story. I've seen similar ones on the internet but this one is particularly horrible. So my friend told me she went out with some of her girl friends to spend the evening at a nightclub. She was single at the time and she would hook up with guys she met and all, but nothing m...
by machin
Thu Dec 01, 2016 9:35 am
Forum: Story Contest: November - December 2016
Topic: We Knew
Replies: 3
Views: 1495

We Knew

(TW: implied domestic violence; implied child death) Everybody knew in the neighborhood. Everybody knew about that little family down the street. Everybody knew about the sweet, little 3-year-old boy who would sing and laugh all by himself only to get scolded by his father. Everybody knew about the ...
by machin
Sun Nov 27, 2016 10:34 am
Forum: Story Contest: November - December 2016
Topic: A Pig's Still A Pig
Replies: 6
Views: 14879

Re: A Pig's Still A Pig

I thought it was well written and well-paced, really nice read. I do think though that it would have been good too if the "friend" had been called Ally and the character Anna. There's more dramatic irony with the "friend" being Ally", thus being an ally etc. would have been...
by machin
Sat Nov 26, 2016 3:04 pm
Forum: Story Contest: November - December 2016
Topic: Soft Teeth
Replies: 5
Views: 2289

Re: Soft Teeth

This one has to be the weirdest Tooth Fairy story I've read!
It was disturbing, disgusting, gave me goosebumps and I loved it!
by machin
Sat Nov 26, 2016 1:50 pm
Forum: Story Contest: November - December 2016
Topic: Plain Jane
Replies: 4
Views: 28388

Re: Plain Jane

Don't know if it's because I'm used to this kind of stories, but I kinda saw it coming once you mentioned the twin sister, so at around the middle of the story, maybe even before that? Otherwise, a really nice read, and an unexpected reaction on behalf of the main character. To give tribute to someo...
by machin
Fri Nov 25, 2016 10:04 pm
Forum: Story Contest: November - December 2016
Topic: They Say I'm Indifferent
Replies: 2
Views: 1267

They Say I'm Indifferent

(edited three times for grammar mistakes and corrections) Honestly, I don't know where to begin with this. I think I should just, say what happened. I need to say it, or write it rather. I need to tell someone about it. Look, I know what you're thinking. Maybe you're gonna think I'm...
by machin
Wed Nov 23, 2016 7:16 pm
Forum: Story Contest: November - December 2016
Topic: A Pig's Still A Pig
Replies: 6
Views: 14879

Re: A Pig's Still A Pig

I thought it was well written and well-paced, really nice read. I do think though that it would have been good too if the "friend" had been called Ally and the character Anna. There's more dramatic irony with the "friend" being Ally", thus being an ally etc. would have been ...
by machin
Sun Nov 20, 2016 12:18 am
Forum: Story Contest: November - December 2016
Topic: Raise Your Glass, Bitch
Replies: 1
Views: 1510

Raise Your Glass, Bitch

[Edited twice because of grammar mistakes + typos] She raises her glass, clears her throat and looks at me, a smile on her face. I freeze. What the hell? Don't tell me... you prepared a speech? This is hilarious. You seriously think you could make a speech at my wedding, on the best day of my life?...
by machin
Fri Oct 21, 2016 4:40 pm
Forum: Story Contest: September - October 2016
Topic: Her Name Was Lollopy Lou
Replies: 10
Views: 18920

Re: Her Name Was Lollopy Lou

The story is amazing, well-paced but I'm sorry to say that there were way too many grammatical mistakes. It made me lose my focus and soon I found myself correcting the mistakes instead of getting into the story, you know? Even though, your writing is great (wording and such) and the story is still ...
by machin
Thu Oct 20, 2016 5:20 pm
Forum: Story Contest: September - October 2016
Topic: You Had It Coming
Replies: 3
Views: 2889

Re: You Had It Coming

Tip? Writing a story that presumes anything about the reader is a fine line to walk; assume too much, and your story falls flat. For example, this wasn't remotely frightening to me, because I live in an apartment; of course there's someone in the room next to me. It's my neighbors. I also don't sle...
by machin
Tue Oct 18, 2016 3:07 pm
Forum: Story Contest: September - October 2016
Topic: That's A Deal
Replies: 4
Views: 2562

Re: That's A Deal

astraldolly wrote:Oh my gosh that was completely unexpected. I'm in love with this story.

I'm soooo glad you liked it! I'm in love with your comment ;) Thank you very much for commenting, it means a lot to me.
by machin
Mon Oct 17, 2016 5:31 pm
Forum: Story Contest: September - October 2016
Topic: Simon Says
Replies: 23
Views: 40766

Re: Simon Says

Clever use of the "Simon says game" trope! Weirdly enough I was expecting you to use the rules of the game to enable people to fight Simon's words back, like if i recall people have to obey when the main player says "simon says" but if he doesn't say the magic words per say, they...
by machin
Sun Oct 16, 2016 5:52 pm
Forum: Story Contest: September - October 2016
Topic: That's A Deal
Replies: 4
Views: 2562

That's A Deal

“So, how's that one feel ? Feels good ?” the man asks. You get up to look at yourself in the mirror. Good wouldn't be your first choice of words. Weird, maybe. “This suit needs some adjustments”, you say. The man smiles. It's creepy. “It's secondhand, afterall. But that one? That's a deal.” You thin...
by machin
Sun Oct 16, 2016 4:31 pm
Forum: Story Contest: September - October 2016
Topic: You Had It Coming
Replies: 3
Views: 2889

You Had It Coming

You should have known it would end up this way. What did you expect ? You've been reading all these terrifying stories, about curses and ghosts and demons and death and still you thought you could stay pure ? Clean ? Safe ? Don't make me laugh. Didn't you know ? The more you read about death and the...
by machin
Tue Aug 16, 2016 5:03 pm
Forum: Story Contest: July - August (2016)
Topic: As A Little Boy
Replies: 15
Views: 4664

Re: As A Little Boy

just_left_of_nowhere wrote:I read it twice before I got it. Then I went "ew". Well done!


"Ew" is exactly the kind of reaction I was aiming for, thanks a lot!

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