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by clockworkfoxxe
Mon Jan 09, 2017 6:01 pm
Forum: Story Contest: January - February 2017
Topic: Marriage Problems
Replies: 14
Views: 10368

Re: Marriage Problems

Well written enough, but INCREDIBLY predictable; I knew what was going on before anything 'weird' was even happening- by like the second paragraph. Still, not a bad telling. :) Ah, really? I attempted to avoid the big 'spouse was actually a corpse all along' thing, hence the way it goes,didn't thin...
by clockworkfoxxe
Mon Jan 09, 2017 4:46 pm
Forum: Story Contest: January - February 2017
Topic: Marriage Problems
Replies: 14
Views: 10368

Re: Marriage Problems

Well written enough, but INCREDIBLY predictable; I knew what was going on before anything 'weird' was even happening- by like the second paragraph. Still, not a bad telling. :)
by clockworkfoxxe
Sat Dec 31, 2016 3:45 pm
Forum: Entertainment
Topic: Class
Replies: 1
Views: 425

Re: Class

I'm super interested in Class- I think I saw a preview for it somewhere? It looks really great, and the fiancee and I both want to get into it. Unfortunately, I live in the US, so finding it might be hard as hell.
by clockworkfoxxe
Sat Dec 31, 2016 3:40 pm
Forum: Game Forum
Topic: Two sentence scary story.
Replies: 16
Views: 1921

Re: Two sentence scary story.

There's nothing better then the sound and smell of horses in a barn, shuffling around and nickering contentedly. Except when it's empty.
by clockworkfoxxe
Sat Dec 31, 2016 3:36 pm
Forum: Story Contest: November - December 2016
Topic: A Love Letter
Replies: 14
Views: 27789

Re: A Love Letter

Honestly? It's forced and sounds like what it is- a story. It's also a really, really, incredibly cliche idea, and that makes it rather hard to be scared of. Well, thanks for the criticism at least. Is there anything else you didn't like? You've critiqued the idea behind it, anything about my writi...
by clockworkfoxxe
Sat Dec 31, 2016 3:33 pm
Forum: Story Contest: November - December 2016
Topic: I Will Get My Reviews One Way Or Another
Replies: 3
Views: 1586

Re: I Will Get My Reviews One Way Or Another

Short, sweet, creepy and nice! All I can say is it narrowly comes close to being a little TOO over the top; but then, that's probably personal opinion, nothing much more then that. Great little story, very paranoia inducing. XD
by clockworkfoxxe
Sun Dec 11, 2016 5:01 pm
Forum: Story Contest: November - December 2016
Topic: A Love Letter
Replies: 14
Views: 27789

Re: A Love Letter

Honestly? It's forced and sounds like what it is- a story. It's also a really, really, incredibly cliche idea, and that makes it rather hard to be scared of.
by clockworkfoxxe
Sun Dec 11, 2016 12:42 pm
Forum: Story Contest: November - December 2016
Topic: Life Lesson
Replies: 1
Views: 1630

Re: Life Lesson

Interesting and cool idea, but you didn't really pull it off well. 'I picked up a knife I thought was a spoon'. Well, that line alone pretty much ruins the story or any suspense. Let the readers think it's a spoon. Save the twist for the end. 'I showed the police my spoon. Turns out, it wasn't.' Or ...
by clockworkfoxxe
Wed Oct 26, 2016 5:54 pm
Forum: Story Contest: September - October 2016
Topic: Will You Listen?
Replies: 8
Views: 1804

Will You Listen?

I present to you, dear reader, a question. What if I told you that you are not you? What if I told you that everything you know to be true- your family, your friends, your lovers, your pets, your home- all of it, any of it- that you've stolen it from someone else? What if I told you that it happened...
by clockworkfoxxe
Wed Oct 19, 2016 3:14 pm
Forum: Story Contest: September - October 2016
Topic: You Had It Coming
Replies: 3
Views: 2888

Re: You Had It Coming

Tip? Writing a story that presumes anything about the reader is a fine line to walk; assume too much, and your story falls flat. For example, this wasn't remotely frightening to me, because I live in an apartment; of course there's someone in the room next to me. It's my neighbors. I also don't slee...
by clockworkfoxxe
Tue Oct 18, 2016 11:29 am
Forum: Short Scary Stories
Topic: Mommy Cuts My Hair
Replies: 3
Views: 4806

Re: Mommy Cuts My Hair

...well that was terrifying. Damn well done last line.
by clockworkfoxxe
Mon Oct 10, 2016 7:20 pm
Forum: Story Contest: September - October 2016
Topic: Hey, Click This. Right Now.
Replies: 5
Views: 2163

Re: Hey, Click This. Right Now.

theoddcatlady wrote:Oh wow, this one was a nice one! Good job!



Yay, thank you! :P
by clockworkfoxxe
Mon Oct 10, 2016 10:00 am
Forum: Story Contest: September - October 2016
Topic: Hey, Click This. Right Now.
Replies: 5
Views: 2163

Hey, Click This. Right Now.

You have a choice. You. Yes, you, I'm talking to you , dumbass, pay attention. You, sitting there trying to entertain yourself, bored, looking for something to do, and now, very likely, not taking this seriously. After all, I'm not the first person to start a story like this, am I? On this website a...
by clockworkfoxxe
Mon Oct 10, 2016 9:57 am
Forum: Off Topic Forum
Topic: Introduce yourself!
Replies: 61
Views: 7615

Re: Introduce yourself!

/Waves shyly Hey guys, you can call me Foxxe or Clock/clockwork. I'm a nearly-thirty year old writer working on my second novel, living with my lovely fiancee and our zoo of two dogs, six cats, and a bunny. I'm only just now branching out into trying to do creepy/scary stories, but I've always loved...
by clockworkfoxxe
Mon Oct 10, 2016 9:34 am
Forum: Story Forum
Topic: Hey, Click This. Right Now.
Replies: 0
Views: 961

Hey, Click This. Right Now.

You have a choice. You. Yes, you, I'm talking to you , dumbass, pay attention. You, sitting there trying to entertain yourself, bored, looking for something to do, and now, very likely, not taking this seriously. After all, I'm not the first person to start a story like this, am I? On this website a...

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